I do hope this is not so long as to be inappropriate (if it is forgive me - unless you are a female spanker!), but I have recently been reading a story, the last episode of a serial, that presents an absolute string of one-liners, any one of which would be a candidate for what you are looking for. So I have copied out a series of extracts. .... marks a substantial section omitted, the odd word is probably not marked.
It is the 6th and final episode of Choices, by DJ Black. It is set in a penal establishment, and is about three women prisoners, Lucy, Patsy and Carol-Anne. The most exciting episode described the punishment of Patsy, a defiant young woman, who has been getting Lucy into trouble, but is secretly looking forward to her own comeuppance at the hands of Karl. She is punished first with a strap, later with a cane
“I want you over the trestle, pretty little bottom pointing at the ceiling. It is time you and I got to understand each other.” … Patsy was bent bare-bottomed over the trestle, her tail end beyond red now, and heading in a decidedly purple direction. … “I trust you can feel that, now.” Patsy gathered herself and said “Feel what?” … “Look at me.” Patsy glanced back at him and tried to look defiant Her face was drenched with tears, her eyes pooled with them, and red. “I can do this all afternoon,” Karl growled. “If that’s what it takes,” Patsy said quietly. “Takes for what?” “For you to tame me”, Patsy said defiantly, as she turned back to fix her gaze on a single point, ready to withstand the next lick of the leather strap. “You think I won’t?” “I think you will,” Patsy said, close to breaking. “And what should I do once I’ve broken you?” “Anything you like.” Patsy said huskily. “But if I were you I should start over on my arse to make sure it takes.” … Moments after his latest assault, she began to shake, and then to let out long slow sobs. By now her bottom was marbled every shade of red and blue through purple to maroon.
“I am going to give you two dozen with the cane to finish you off.” “Make it three dozen or you can go to hell, wimp!” Patsy challenged. Karl put down the cane and began another round of strapping until Patsy was sobbing uncontrollably. “How many did I say?” Karl roared. “Two dozen, sir!” Patsy wailed. “Good girl. Now remember to count. And in three days you can report to me for another 24 strokes for arguing. I’ll deal with the wimp crack more fully then!” “Yes sir,” Patsy sobbed. … Carol-Anne leaned into the doorpost, breathing almost as heavily as Patsy was within. She couldn’t believe how red and swollen the woman’s bottom was, nor how defiant she was being. Carol-Anne was in awe. … The cane landed with a tighter, harder sound, and Patsy yelped as it bit home. … Later, Patsy is found by Lucy:
… A rather sheepish Patsy was sitting naked in a large bowl of water in the middle of the floor. … “Karl sent me to apologise for being a bitch. I kind of played a prank too far, and he … well, took me in hand, so to speak.” She took a deep breath. “If you don’t accept my apology, I have to … well, go back for seconds. I know, I know, I have got it coming, I won’t beg. Well, unless you want me to. You could make me beg and still reject my apology. … “You don’t seem to be as afraid as you might be,” said Lucy suspiciously. “Well, you know. It’s tough on my behind, but Karl digs it, and I … well, I dig Karl.” Patsy couldn’t meet Lucy’s gaze. “And if I do accept?” “Then you are invited to my next punishment in three days in any case.”
That is a brilliant piece of writing, and presents a whole series of memorable remarks and bits of description which make it stand out! |