I am losttrying to write a serial ...

I love "getting your behand (sic) massaged at home".

Took me a second to realise what I was reading.

I think we can assume that a German Schüler (schoolboy) would have less than perfect English and may not know what is English usage and what is American. So anything goes. English is, of course, a notoriously difficult language. I think that schoolboy English for the German narrator of a spanking story would be charming.

Read, read and read. Write, write and write. I knew a French spankee and author who told me she used LSF to improve her English.

Geoffrey Stirling.

Seegee


Where'd that Stephen King quote come from?

I've written precious few serials, so my advice could be suspect, but nonetheless, here it is:

Don't "try to write a serial." Write a STORY, telling what there is to say. If it ends up being long (e.g., significantly onger than your 3000 words, then go back through it to figure out where the "natural" break points are, and make those your chapter endings. While writing, you might also realize you've reached a natural breakpoint, and decide to start a new chapter.

Moody but getting you behand massaged at home could happen.

This is a new one for me, and I may steal it at some point. Though to be honest, when Dad got through using a belt on me, or a teacher or Principal got done paddling me, I didn't feel like I'd gotten m behind, "massaged."

I tend to write about what I know. I grew up and still live in Texas, which is a state that still allows corporal punishment in schools. I started First Grade in 1965 and graduated High School in 1977 when school paddling was the norm and very much in use. I experienced I believe 6 or 7 time in 12 years, so I know it.

I also write about what interests me, hence many stories that go into how the punished and the punisher feel about the proceedings, their emotions, before, during and after.

That also means I tend to use that subset of American English, known as Texas English. Many of the places are in Texas, many of the foods are well known in Texas, and for decades the wooden paddle was well known in Texas schools.

The Stephen King is from On Writing, a book he wrote about the art. King himself is a ‘pantser’.

@stevenr @njrick
it was supposed to be behind hot hand even though my father limited himself to handspanking
But I can assure you, you didn't luxuriate in a handspanking by him.
Texas,... John Wayne, do people still know him ?
Actually I started to write a story. Then I realized that the story would easily exceed 5000 words before any spanking happens since I don't believe in spankings without reason.
I learned this year that schools in England got school uniforms, which means the teacher will use girls in skirts as bait for her trap I am pretty sure quite a few of us boys would have stepped with open eyes into such a trap. Yes I admit boys are a bit short sighted. Yes you females here we males like to let other body parts do the thinking besides the brain and I know we are disgusting pigs. No need to tell me.

@Geoffrey
der Schüler = the school boy
die Schülerin = the school girl
I once read that genderalignment of words makes the English run when it comes to the German language it is logical for a large part but then it gets advanturous

the woman - die Frau - is female
the man . der Mann - is male
the boy - der Junge - easy it is male too
the girl - girls are female so it has to be die Mädchen WRONG while die Mädchen is true for multiple girls its wrong for a single girl a single girl is das Mädchen which is neuter - think of it as an irregular verb. Personally I think french is worse it only has male and female all neeuter words turn either male or female
but not only that:
the moon - der Mond (in German its male) - la monde (in french its female) I guess transgender people would really be happy, go to France and you switch gender ;)

One problem I got is the time, how would pupils kill the time travelling when there are no smart phones and I had to drop to-do-list I am pretty sure while its a common word nowadays it wasn't in 1981

I suspect it's neuter because of the diminutive (-chen). It's that way in Dutch (my language). As soon as a diminutive is added to a word, the word becomes neuter.
One thing I like about English is that they dropped that nonsense of giving words a gender. Who needs that anyway? It's ridiculous.


Listening to music on the car radio or the walkman, chatting to each other, reading, trying to catch up on homework, staring out the window and letting their mind wander to their upcoming spanking.

@DianaMiller
The question about killing time was more of a rhetorical question since I participated and we played cards which I will mention since we didn't play poker or blackjack but Skat which is probably not known to the Americans and English. I want to show that the character isn't a gambler and Skat is more of a strategic game. Well to include a girl I might even add some MauMau probably unknown too. I already dropped the idea of explaining it which would add 10000 words. In German its 10.000 words while in English its 10,000 words. The decimal point is in German a decimal comma just vise versa. But if you don't mind I might want to highjack the walkman.

Another thing I won't add ist the metric system ;) but it might add nice spanking reasons in the kitchen. Was it NASA that used meter and yard calculating the route of a satellite?
A month or two ago I was interested on the size of English milk bottles and was shocked when i saw pictures with 500ml bottles the same as in Germany. Then I checked the size of a pinte which is rougjly 470ml in England and 480ml in the US of A. Then I was curious and Scotland and Wales too. Result in Scottland you shouldn't forget a bucket if you want a pinte of milk. Its more than 3 times the size uf an English pinte.

When I first encountered that a German Billion is't the same as an angloamerian billion I got aproblem since a German Billion is 1000 times an angloamerican billion. It was about the US budget.
1
1.000 Tausend 1,000 thousand
1.000.000 Million 1,000,000 million
1.000.000.000 Milliarde 1,000,000,000 billion
1.000.000.000.000 Billion 1,000,000,000,000 trillion

Can't say I liked his politics (or some of his films), but I did once meet him. I was working in an off-license (a liquor store) in Kings Road, Chelsea, and he came in with an entourage. He was huge.


Your earlier post said 3,000 words - is there no escape from this cursed inflation? But seriously... even 5000 words can be okay if your build-up is titillating enough (mentions of spanking help in this regard).

Another way round it - if your story leads up to just the one spanking - is to open with a brief passage describing part of the spanking itself (as it starts, or perhaps half way through). You don't have to specify who it is, where, when or why - your readers will work that out later. After this captivating start, your readers will, with any luck, want to read on to fill in the details.

Finally, don't be afraid of a long, stand-alone story. There are probably just as many library members who prefer long stories as there are those who avoid them. But if you want to write a serial, and your goal is to maximise readership, then each part needs to have its own spanking, otherwise you're saddled with that dreaded white circle signifying NO ACTUAL SPANKING which is guaranteed to send fair-weather readers running a mile.

@TheEnglishMaster

I know that John Wayne was of Phil Sheridan's mind. "Only a dead indian is a good indian. Which already was antiquated in 1981.

I think that 3000 words are a reasonable limit for single installments with more I always fear that I won't find the point where I left. At 5000 words it seems that it might even start to get too long for a two part story. In part one there will be 2 key moments. Cologne main railway station where they got a tigh time table to switch to another train and Cologne station is not a small station. And it doesn't help if the smokers retired to a smoker cabin in the next car. I really got it for smokers. And another at the ferry when faced with the customs documents.

Actually I had planned on part 1 being the explanation for what happens next, but since my English for sure isn't A-level I might not want fair-weather readers working on their health ;) and start thinking about a spanking for part one.

I originally planned a spanking or caning for the smokers in part 2. When I thought about part 1.5 I though a slippering in PE for unsportsmanlike conduct would be ok and in 2.5 the headmaster expressing his displeasure for the scheming teacher.

Just had the idea of a handspanking for part 1. I already planned that the headmaster could house a pupil, if he has a daughter it might be explainable that he is no fan of the idea of pupils gawking at girls in skirts when they visit his school. It should be possible to include it at a cost of less than 1000 words.