Memorable Lines in Spanking Fiction

One of my favorite lines. "You have had this coming for a long time." Implies spanker has had in mind for long time. Pleased that the time has arrived.. Spankee to receive a memorable spanking. I also agree with njrick. "Its meant to hurt.

My submission to this interesting thread comes from Tinker, Taylor, Schoolgirl, Cry by Kephren. The attention seeking naughty schoolgirl had bent over to pick up a pencil which distracted the guys in class.

"Eyes were fixed on her salacious bottom with its clearly visible panty line and white lace trimming peeping provocatively over the top of her tight pants.

Yep, takes you through the entire experience as if she's trying to convince herself this is really what's about to happen to her. Great guide for how to write a story where the actual spanking is secondary to what's going on in her head before, during, and after.

"It's only Whops, it's only Whops!" - repeated as a mantra by the recipient of a sound caning - to encourage herself to greater stoicism"

This may be found in R Humphries, in the Whops and Clobber series. I think it is used in more than one place, but it is certainly to be found in the first of the series.

I have used it myself, and can vouch for the fact that - while not totally successful - its use does remind you that you are not the first person in that uncomfortable position!

I have some more to suggest, but will send another response later!

Dave Ell's Sammy Simpkins! Definitely a memorable line, although it must be British humour, because while funny, I haven't got a clue what it means. I mean I know what it means, and why she is saying it. I mean, she supposedly loves spankings, as in the harder, the better, so why would she be rationalizing it?

Related sad fact, I learned that sometimes you have to watch what you say as a fan. I had a conversation with Dave Ell, saying his line work was choice, but how sad he was using crayons to color his work. I said, relatively speaking, digital coloring is really easy, and crayons don't really give a depth to his art work. Just scan his linework into a computer and color it and I think his artwork could only improve. He took the critique to heart, and I learned fans need to shut the F up, sometimes.

The only whops line came from a series set in an alternate world where misbehaving young British ladies known as ladettes were sent to a reformatory school rather like an old fashioned British boarding school. I wish I could remember the name of the series. It used to be posted here, maybe still is. Whops is their word for being caned, presumably because of the sound the cane makes when it lands. Dave Ell illustrated it for the website, and it may have also been used in the Sammy Simpkins artwork, too.

I do hope this is not so long as to be inappropriate (if it is forgive me - unless you are a female spanker!), but I have recently been reading a story, the last episode of a serial, that presents an absolute string of one-liners, any one of which would be a candidate for what you are looking for. So I have copied out a series of extracts. .... marks a substantial section omitted, the odd word is probably not marked.

It is the 6th and final episode of Choices, by DJ Black. It is set in a penal establishment, and is about three women prisoners, Lucy, Patsy and Carol-Anne. The most exciting episode described the punishment of Patsy, a defiant young woman, who has been getting Lucy into trouble, but is secretly looking forward to her own comeuppance at the hands of Karl. She is punished first with a strap, later with a cane

“I want you over the trestle, pretty little bottom pointing at the ceiling. It is time you and I got to understand each other.”
…
Patsy was bent bare-bottomed over the trestle, her tail end beyond red now, and heading in a decidedly purple direction.
…
“I trust you can feel that, now.”
Patsy gathered herself and said “Feel what?”
…
“Look at me.”
Patsy glanced back at him and tried to look defiant Her face was drenched with tears, her eyes pooled with them, and red.
“I can do this all afternoon,” Karl growled.
“If that’s what it takes,” Patsy said quietly.
“Takes for what?”
“For you to tame me”, Patsy said defiantly, as she turned back to fix her gaze on a single point, ready to withstand the next lick of the leather strap.
“You think I won’t?”
“I think you will,” Patsy said, close to breaking.
“And what should I do once I’ve broken you?”
“Anything you like.” Patsy said huskily. “But if I were you I should start over on my arse to make sure it takes.”
…
Moments after his latest assault, she began to shake, and then to let out long slow sobs. By now her bottom was marbled every shade of red and blue through purple to maroon.

“I am going to give you two dozen with the cane to finish you off.”
“Make it three dozen or you can go to hell, wimp!” Patsy challenged.
Karl put down the cane and began another round of strapping until Patsy was sobbing uncontrollably.
“How many did I say?” Karl roared.
“Two dozen, sir!” Patsy wailed.
“Good girl. Now remember to count. And in three days you can report to me for another 24 strokes for arguing. I’ll deal with the wimp crack more fully then!”
“Yes sir,” Patsy sobbed.
…
Carol-Anne leaned into the doorpost, breathing almost as heavily as Patsy was within. She couldn’t believe how red and swollen the woman’s bottom was, nor how defiant she was being. Carol-Anne was in awe.
…
The cane landed with a tighter, harder sound, and Patsy yelped as it bit home.
…
Later, Patsy is found by Lucy:

…
A rather sheepish Patsy was sitting naked in a large bowl of water in the middle of the floor.
…
“Karl sent me to apologise for being a bitch. I kind of played a prank too far, and he … well, took me in hand, so to speak.”
She took a deep breath. “If you don’t accept my apology, I have to … well, go back for seconds. I know, I know, I have got it coming, I won’t beg. Well, unless you want me to. You could make me beg and still reject my apology. …
“You don’t seem to be as afraid as you might be,” said Lucy suspiciously.
“Well, you know. It’s tough on my behind, but Karl digs it, and I … well, I dig Karl.” Patsy couldn’t meet Lucy’s gaze.
“And if I do accept?”
“Then you are invited to my next punishment in three days in any case.”

That is a brilliant piece of writing, and presents a whole series of memorable remarks and bits of description which make it stand out!

There are several lines from THE TALK that were memorable:

Mrs. Brooks wasn't looking forward to administering the admittedly overdue discipline that was to follow very shortly, but she found to her surprise that she wasn't exactly hating the pre-game show as much as she'd expected to.

AND WHEN SHELLY'S JAMMY PANTS COME DOWN, SHE THINKS

And here's a nice big side-order of embarrassment to go with your fear, she thought.

Here's one from Diana Gabaldon's Cross Stitch ( called Outlander in some places). The hero Jamie is about to administer a strap to his unwilling wife's bottom.

"I'll scream"
"Likely. If not before, certainly during, I expect they'll hear you in the next farm; you've got a good pair of lungs"

I set a Christmas spanking story in Finland ("The Elf") which allowed me to go into new environs:


“You just abused and assaulted me and one of my staff!” replied Father Christmas. “And stolen Lusitania’s birching!”

“Do you think I WANTED my arse beaten bloody?” raged Bryony.

“Yes,” said Black Peter. “This is Finland, it’s what everybody does. Then you go and throw yourself naked in the snow or into an icy fjord."

Well, maybe that's a tad over-imaginative, I dunno.