Home Visit

It may interest a few people to know that my new story 'Home Visit' at least started off as a sort of mirror-image tribute to Pablo Stubbs's superb 'Will I Cry, Sis?' (not on this site, but well known) - a story which I love despite finding many of the parental elements, and the spanking of minors, particularly the bare-bottom spanking of minors, extremely creepy.

I've said in one or two private messages on this site that I think it's basically impossible to write the actual spanking part of a spanking story well. I've never, ever read what I regard as a good description of the spanking itself, only an adequate one - at best. That part of a story is, for me, what pictures, still and moving, are for.

What 'Home Visit' particularly tries to borrow from 'Will I Cry, Sis?' is using a character's recollection to provide edited highlights of the spanking, rather than having to narrate every last detail. And to do so in a fragmentary fashion, jumping backwards and forwards in time, rather than telling the whole thing as one potentially tedious block. (Another of my stories, 'Manners', similarly uses a character's narration to provide edited highlights, but does so in a simple linear fashion, and the device there is instead to dwell on the setting, and to describe the actual spanking only fairly minimally.)

It's also following what feels like the general direction of 'Will I Cry, Sis?' and going even further, telling the entire story through dialogue. (It strikes me - moderate spoiler - as inelegant to have had to introduce a third speaker, but all the alternative endings I could think of seemed worse.)

I ended up writing Katie far younger than I'd originally intended - doubtless making it, for many people, too implausible how much information she is given. But I needed her to say certain things and in a certain way.

The name of this forum is "plugboard". I am impressed by your ability to conform to its intention. You've mentioned two of your stories. I was prompted to read " Home Visit" and "Manners". I don't know if your descriptions are meant to be modest or provocative. If your spoon needs polishing, perhaps it is best if you do it yourself.


You sir, prove yourself a liar. I don't think the description of the spanking Hetta receives in "Manners" is merely adequate. However, it does have a "simple lineal" aspect. The lines, or stripes, on Hetta's bottom are numerous and pronounced. If you are describing "the actual spanking only minimally", I can't imagine where your mind would go if you decided to add more detail. But I'm sure I would spend a lot of time trying to figure it out.

I share your concern about the ages of children appearing in spanking stories. Sometimes I need to remind myself that it's only a story. It's not real. And I don't have to make it real. Perhaps there's a fine line here. If I feel a line has been crossed, I can choose not to read. I tend to make a distinction concerning what I consider "The age of Innocence", "The age of Consent" and the age where almost anything goes.

I've had a few private messages on this subject, so I'll augment it with a couple of examples from very popular stories on this site (one of them expanding on a comment I've already left).

[ spoilers, albeit involving quite old stories... ]

In DJ Black's 'Back To School', the central event of the wife's caning is, if you look at it, barely described at all. Instead, the earlier canings of the pupils in effect stand in as the description of that central event. And those are told from the viewpoint of someone not actually in the room. They're not exactly "edited highlights", but nor are they a simple linear description of a spanking taking place.

In Jon Thorn's 'Bring Back The Cane', there is, admittedly, quite a lengthy description of a caning, but in order to set up a second half of the story which then simply isn't told at all.

A slightly different way of expressing my point, illustrated by these two stories, is that I think it's more effective to let the reader fill in the actual description of the spanking rather than trying to do so yourself, narrating its, er, blow-by-blow details.