I'm not really the one to ask but it is an intriguing story line, I'm just a bit confused as to where it is going. I very definitely know what I'd do if I were writing it, but I don't know what you two have in mind. However I will say that if you write it, I will read it. Here's what I like: the idea of parallel worlds and a female heroine who is trapped and trying to get back. But I am confused about the Merlin/Rowan relationship. Is he helping her? Does he want her permanently? What does she want?
Graham Masterson wrote a book called The Doorkeepers about a parallel universe that had agents who kidnapped people from 20th century London. I thought that basic plot had real possibilities. | 
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