I am requesting for a volunteer to critically review my candidate for a first story.
Basic concept: A freshman couple is making out in the bushes close to a park bench on the college grounds when another couple approaches and sits on the bench, who appear to be a professor and a student. The couple are in shock not only from the fact that the girl is going to get a spanking, but the girl is looking right at them and knows they are watching.
There are other elements that make the story very intense, perhaps much more intense than any story I have read here. By intense I do not mean any character is abusive or brutal, but rather, the story is situationally and sexually intense.
The story is also not intended to be overly realistic, but rather, is intended to push some buttons that most of the readers here possess.
Is there a volunteer?
v/r, Gour Met | 
